Reform: Example 2

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Excerpt from Progeny #1, by Jeffrey Vasquez


Original:

Now all he had to do was get her to get off of him without giving her the wrong idea; or
touching anything that he shouldn't. From the way that her heart was beating, he was sure that
she was in shock; hopefully that would make things easier. All he had to do was take it slow,
and if he was lucky she wouldn't even know what happened. Of course, Ranma should have
known better.

His luck had never been that good.

He opened his eyes slowly, and simply stared all the color draining from his face.

********

Ami watched her rescuer's face drain of color. She watched as various emotions played out
on his face: shock, disbelief, denial, pain... She could feel the depth of his ache as it registered
in those striking eyes of his. Buried beneath the pain was such an intense sentiment, a love so
profound that Ami felt herself undeniably being consumed.

She couldn't escape the ardent passion, and something inside her admitted that she didn't really
want to. All thoughts of exams and studying went flying right out the window as she met those
wonderfully blue eyes. Well, not really, but they sure didn't seem as important as they had a
few moments ago...

Ami had read about the "Eternal Moment", but had never really understood the concept...until
now. Time seemed to stop, and the world fell away. No sound entered her ears except for his
breathing and her own pounding heart beat. She couldn't register any smells, save for the
bittersweet scent of his sweat mixed with a fabric softener. All that she could feel was the
effortless strength with which he cradled her, and the gentle hands that had protected her from
the harsh bite of the pavement.

Formatted: reform -b -s -w progeny-01.txt

Now all he had to do was get her to get off of him without giving her
the wrong idea; or touching anything that he shouldn't. From the way
that her heart was beating, he was sure that she was in shock; hopefully
that would make things easier. All he had to do was take it slow, and if
he was lucky she wouldn't even know what happened. Of course, Ranma
should have known better.

His luck had never been that good.

He opened his eyes slowly, and simply stared all the color draining from
his face.

********

Ami watched her rescuer's face drain of color. She watched as various
emotions played out on his face: shock, disbelief, denial, pain... She
could feel the depth of his ache as it registered in those striking eyes
of his. Buried beneath the pain was such an intense sentiment, a love so
profound that Ami felt herself undeniably being consumed.

She couldn't escape the ardent passion, and something inside her
admitted that she didn't really want to. All thoughts of exams and
studying went flying right out the window as she met those wonderfully
blue eyes. Well, not really, but they sure didn't seem as important as
they had a few moments ago...

Ami had read about the "Eternal Moment", but had never really understood
the concept...until now. Time seemed to stop, and the world fell away.
No sound entered her ears except for his breathing and her own pounding
heart beat. She couldn't register any smells, save for the bittersweet
scent of his sweat mixed with a fabric softener. All that she could feel
was the effortless strength with which he cradled her, and the gentle
hands that had protected her from the harsh bite of the pavement.